Jasmine Hart

Em...ok, now I'm confused... :?

Great, my eyes are welling up. This is rare! I love it, especially the first stanza.Your imagery is brilliant, and I love the contrast between lines two and three. I ...

I love them both, especially the first one, as I was really impressed that you managed to tell a story given the constraints of this form. I loved the alliteration ...

Brilliant. I really loved the last stanza, especially the last sentence. I think, in the second line, I'd omit "in its waters", because...well, I'm not really sure why, maybe because ...

Em...woah. I love it. It reminded me of Plath's villanelles. I LOVE Plath. The first thing I'd say is, where's the punctuation? :( Poor neglected punctuation, why are you so ...

Lovely. I have a few minor suggestions; I'd omit "to" from the second line as it's not needed. I don't like "dirt-dirty", but I loved "not a nothing in sight". ...

Wow. I'd try to say something constructive, but I'm too amazed and frankly I think this is perfect. I loved the ending, especially the last line. It sounded really musical ...

Ya, I'm with Meep on the role playing thing. It really helps. Also, there's a great book called "What would your character do?" by Ann and Eric Maisel, which really ...

Ya, anything really, though it can depend on what I want to write. Garbage, Evanessence, and Alanis Morisette are pretty good for getting me in a writing mood. Though, I'm ...

Like notes about all their information, or the sort of enteries which they would write? I might give that a go. Have you ever tried doing character quizzes? I have ...

Brigid "Siofra," I tried weakly. Freedom was nice. In fact, freedom was great, there was nothing I wanted more...except for my last living sister to stay living. "yes?" She asked, ...

Abigail "Hurry up Mrs. Wilmot! Do you want us to be late?" I sighed. Mrs Wilmot. It made me sound so old. The men in the stories I read never ...

Think of it this way, every rejection slip brings your acceptance closer. And rejection prooves you're doing something. That's what I tell myself when I'm rejected. I know you probably ...

Heehee. My screenname isn't an animal at all, especially not a weirdly coloured one :( and my fish is orange, which is normal. But I do have a notebook beside ...

I know nothing about art, so I can't say anything constructive, except that I am seriously in love with that squirrel! The background is beautiful, but I think it has ...